Having read Lord of the Flies, and having read your essay, I feel that I already understand The Inheritors. William Golding is a fantastic author, a man so scarred by his experiences in war that it changed who he was, and inspired him in the worst way possible to write about the horror of human nature. You did an excellent job explaining and supporting your thesis, although you could have used a little more direct evidence. I enjoyed your description of the differences in the islands on which the Neanderthals and homo sapiens lived, and how those differences point to the meaning of the book, and what Golding is trying to say about human nature. However, I think there are many different ways you could have taken this prompt, and there are many different ways you could interpret the differences in the island. From reading your essay, I think it may be possible that Golding was also trying to say that the progression in technology is regressive for society. The homo sapiens were a more ‘advanced’ race, they had bows and arrows, and other such technological advantages over the Neanderthals. And yet, as you wrote, they are disgusting savages who make human sacrifices. This is just to say that there are probably many interpretations of The Inheritors, and you did a good job at analyzing the interpretation you chose.
I was really interested to see more of your project, mostly because I really liked Golding’s Lord of the Flies. Thank you for including the prompt that you were responding to in the post, it is very helpful in understanding what you need to be getting at in your essay. Also, this prompt was pretty much perfect for the subject matter of your book. There is a good flow throughout your essay, even between paragraphs which seems to be something others tend to forget. I liked your hook for this essay, very attention grabbing. The diction of your essay is formal and yet easy to read at the same time. Your writing addresses complexity without being too complex itself. Your quote integration is fairly smooth, the only ones that don’t fit quite as well are the two that are back to back in the third paragraph, “Lok is in awe of the “strange people and all their inscrutable works” (Golding 179). “The new people came to the overhang” (Golding 133) and soon all that was comforting and warm about the terrace was gone.” Maybe it is just a personal preference on my part, but it feels as though the second quote is too sudden here. The essay as a whole fit together very well and I like that you effectively brought the writing full circle in your conclusion.
Having read Lord of the Flies, and having read your essay, I feel that I already understand The Inheritors. William Golding is a fantastic author, a man so scarred by his experiences in war that it changed who he was, and inspired him in the worst way possible to write about the horror of human nature. You did an excellent job explaining and supporting your thesis, although you could have used a little more direct evidence. I enjoyed your description of the differences in the islands on which the Neanderthals and homo sapiens lived, and how those differences point to the meaning of the book, and what Golding is trying to say about human nature.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I think there are many different ways you could have taken this prompt, and there are many different ways you could interpret the differences in the island. From reading your essay, I think it may be possible that Golding was also trying to say that the progression in technology is regressive for society. The homo sapiens were a more ‘advanced’ race, they had bows and arrows, and other such technological advantages over the Neanderthals. And yet, as you wrote, they are disgusting savages who make human sacrifices. This is just to say that there are probably many interpretations of The Inheritors, and you did a good job at analyzing the interpretation you chose.
I was really interested to see more of your project, mostly because I really liked Golding’s Lord of the Flies. Thank you for including the prompt that you were responding to in the post, it is very helpful in understanding what you need to be getting at in your essay. Also, this prompt was pretty much perfect for the subject matter of your book.
ReplyDeleteThere is a good flow throughout your essay, even between paragraphs which seems to be something others tend to forget. I liked your hook for this essay, very attention grabbing. The diction of your essay is formal and yet easy to read at the same time. Your writing addresses complexity without being too complex itself. Your quote integration is fairly smooth, the only ones that don’t fit quite as well are the two that are back to back in the third paragraph, “Lok is in awe of the “strange people and all their inscrutable works” (Golding 179). “The new people came to the overhang” (Golding 133) and soon all that was comforting and warm about the terrace was gone.” Maybe it is just a personal preference on my part, but it feels as though the second quote is too sudden here. The essay as a whole fit together very well and I like that you effectively brought the writing full circle in your conclusion.